Peer Reviews

Film #13 Peer Reviews

What specific elements of the film opening did you like?	Was there anything that left you confused? (be specific)	What suggestions do you have for changes?
I like that the opener started out pretty normal with the girl explaining her morning until it reached the part with the goldfish and then it just went downhill.	Is the goldfish supposed to be a friend of the girl or is the goldfish her child?	Change the dialogue where the girl talks about jogging to walking so it matches the scenes that are shown
I like the relatability. I also enjoyed the eating pizza in the bathroom first thing in the morning and also wrapping the goldfish like a baby.	It was extremely hard to hear dialogue so I couldn’t tell what the plot was. It took me a second to realize that the cuts to talking to the camera was documentary style.	I suggest turning up the audio and trimming the talk-to-camera bits, since you can clearly see where they start and stop the camera. I think you could add more comedic elements using the camera, to maybe capture a “The Office” vibe.
I liked the blog-style element, it makes the opener feel more personal for some reason. I also like the cutting of the scenes.	I didn't really catch why there was blogging in the first place.	The alarm at the beginning could be a bit louder, I like the concept nonetheless.
I liked that she was original about her film. I also liked her transitions and editing	The story is confusing. I am not sure if it is supposed to be a video about her routine.	I think she should speak up a little because it was very hard to hear her and maybe make the video a little shorter. She should also try to make her story more direct because I am not sure what she was going for. It is almost like she was vlogging but I do not know what genre that is. I am curious
- The film was very entertaining, and accurate to the time period. The music was also appropriate, and the final sentence of the opening made me want to watch more.	- What genre is the film opener? Is it crime, thriller, or black and white?	- the quality is a bit gritty. Hopefully, you can fix the quality a bit.
I liked how you narrated your actions, it was almost like you were being interrogated.	What left me confused was the reasoning as to why you were talking about your routine. Were you being questioned or was this a biography?	I think you should explain how you got into the position you were and why you were discussing what you were discussing.
I liked that there was so much narration, it allowed me to understand what was going on in the film easily.	This was also enteratining. as the audience would never have expected that the goldfish was not real. What genre of film of this? Will you add any music? Also, is the women mentally disturbed and thats why shes carrying around this Goldfish? - Shorten it a bit, perhaps add some sound.
I liked the lighting in the scenes of this film opening especially, as it contrasted between the dark LED lit bedroom, and the brightly lit conversational portions	. The acting was also good, as the fluctuations in the main characters voice portrayed how emotional she was getting as she told her story. I was a bit confused on the storytelling aspect of the film. The elements of the scenes and what she was discussing were clearly connected, but it was hard to understand how all of the parts related to each other. I would suggest a higher quality camera, especially in the dark scenes outside, as I found it a bit hard to see what was going on by the end.

 Most of my peer review were clear to the fact that my film was original; however, they also mention my plot and storyline was a bit confusing. Some mentioned that the audio was a bit low and others stated that I should add more music. With this feedback I plan to strengthen my storyline, do some more editing cuts, ad more music, and make my genre more clear.